My comic!

well I thought I would talk about my comic idea called Grim Reaper now i've already got character ideas and story line so ill try not to give out to much so any ways- Its starts out with 14 year old Jace and  his 25 year old father Luke Dragom. They have moved in to a new city witch will be deemed nameless for now ass they  are setting up there market shop neighbours come to see who's moving in, and what there setting up well Jace and his father gets to talking with them and explains that for some unknown reason witch they can not say they had to move  from there current home (suddenly), The door  bust open and 5 hugely buff men barge in. These men looked like the type of men you wouldn't mess with  and they weren't, One of them has a dark blood red  mo-hawk and went to explain the other four were identically bald or had black mo- hawks Luke shouts "HEY", Jace and the crowed  is thinking " what the hell", By the looks of the neighbours  they no who they are and the mood of the room turns in to a mixture of fear and intensity, The red mo-hawk  man is identified as sir Dugly and refers t his men as grunts and explains that to  him they are his lowers and are not worthy of a name but its pretty obvious that there getting paid so well that they don't care most of the are ether thieves murderers  or need a good  pay, so your usual stab you in the back  thug but they looked close so know one wanted to test it. Dugly explains that he owns the apocalypse gang  and talks on about how he owns the city gang wise  and how they must pay taxes to them them  yells them that sens they did not pay the entry fee (pulls out a gun) and say "the fee for one miss of taxes is ", Just then Jace leaps int action but Dugly doges  Jace is then  grabbed by his gang banging pay off pals Luke is about to jump in to action he acts as if  he could do some thing but stops for some as if if he did some thing bad might happen totally worse than this,
Dugly  points his gun and says, "the toll for not paying is one costumer." it seemed so deathly long as shots went thought the fat man  in the small white T goes down the feel of death mixes with the air Dugly laughing turns and says, "beat the boy." Luke screams, "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" Dugly turns and says, "what i cant hurt you you might not pay." As he smiles, Jace is beaten Dugly and his thugs goes to leave Dugly whispers, "Next time, pay up." Jace is beaten badly on the floor the fat man in the white T  dies and the room goes quite  as why rushes thought there minds and the becomes empty.
Later Jace laying in his bed gets up to go walk off the beating handed to him thoughts rush though his head, I need to to do some thing, I must do some thing, Suddenly the  air  feels with a unfamiliar stench Jace is confronted by a demonically looking figure The mood is dark and intense  Jace asks, "who the hell are you." The demonic man is at  first client then smiles and says, 'Do you want power, I can give you power." The mood then becomes more intense  as Jace has a familiar look of fear on his face and arguably agrees then Jace is knocked out by the man Jace wakes u to him self being strapped on a table and says as he struggles, "What the hellllllllllll!" The old man says with laugh, "you said you wanted power  as he plants a chi in the  back of his neck, you just wont have  control over your self and be a slave to my master DOMINICA" As Jace struggle he notices an orb of flowing energy as he struggles he some how breaks free  and hits the orb  the orb cracks and the energy flows in to Jace in the form of energy a demonically looking figure goes in to Jace and yells, "Noooooooooooooo, you fooooooool!" energy flowing  in to Jace  burning his flesh Jace screams,"AAAAAAAAA!"
the mood settle's and is sitting in the spot where Jace was is a skeleton with smoke emitting from it and starts to move!
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so what do you think of my idea my original idea!